Quick apology: I have two "versions" of the story, one slightly edited, the other not so much. I've been kind of bouncing between them because I keep forgetting which is which. I'll stick with the current edit as much as I can.
L’lorne nearly replied when she noticed the ghost rolling something out on the table. Blueprints for a very familiar building. “Wait a second,” she said, examining the plans in more detail. “Well, that’s a coincidence.”
“Don’t I?” the ghost groaned. “They’re constantly on me despite how perfect my design is. They’re always looking for ways to improve it, even though that is nearly impossible without compromising everything. In fact, if you’re here to suggest another design improvement, you can’t just see yourself right back out, because it needs no improvement.”
“Where better to hide something you don’t want the public to see than in a place no one with any sense would ever want to go?”
“I imagine it was very effective.”
The ghost looked at L’lorne for a moment. “You’re not planning on putting people in this vault, are you?”
“Yeah,” Deborah said, as she watched the ghost slowly fill his bowl with milk and cereal, ready to repeat his own murder again. She took off the glasses, not willing to watch it again. “How did you, uh, speak to him and have him speak back?”
“You just have to want to communicate with them,” L’lorne said. “In your case, the glasses would handle the rest.” She walked back to the sleeping area, Deborah quickly following. “Thanks to him. . .” L’lorne started.
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Questions
1. What kind of person is Lcorn Llorne? What does she look like (in your mind)?
2. What kind of person is the Deborah Ignigus? What does she look like (in your mind)?
3. Does the setting seem fitting? Would you like to know more?
4. Does it feel out of place that suddenly there's a ghost in this story?
“This isn’t
so bad,” Deborah said as the door finally gave way and let them inside. There was still some furniture, most of it
rotted away, and the carpet was equally bad, but to Deborah this was
practically a palace compared to what she had been sleeping in before she had
met L’lorne. The roof looked solid,
there wasn’t any serious water damage, no spent syringes or pipes laying about,
and no other bums to be seen anywhere. L’lorne
scanned through the rooms slowly as they checked the floorboards and began
picking an area to spend the night.
“This
reminds me of this place on 12th street,” Deborah said as they
settled down into a relatively clean area near the kitchen doorway. “About a dozen of us took over the place for
about a week, though I think many of them had been there longer. Eventually, some cops showed up and chased us
off, but it was nice while it lasted.”
She chuckled, more to herself than anything else. “Some people claimed it was haunted, so when
the cops burst in, they freaked completely, thinking the ghosts were going to
get them. It was pretty funny.”
“You didn’t
believe it was haunted?”
“Pfft,
believing in ghosts is baby stuff. They
don’t exist.”
L’lorne
smiled. “I bet he disagrees with you.”
Deborah
turned around and gave a slight shriek as a figure appeared in the kitchen
nearby. The sudden reaction caused the
sunglasses she was still wearing to instantly go black and Deborah cried out
again as she was blinded.
“It’s
alright,” L’lorne told her, holding her slightly. “He won’t hurt you, trust me. He probably doesn’t even know we’re here.”
The glasses
finally relaxed as Deborah relaxed and she could see the ghost again. The man looked to be in his 40’s or 50’s,
hair would have been white except for the light, otherworldly green that seemed
to cause him to glow. He was wearing, of
all things, pajamas, and slowly eating a bowl of what looked like cereal, with
a bottle of milk sitting next to him.
The table was real, but the things on it and the ghost didn’t seem all
that real. She pulled off the
sunglasses, and the figure was gone.
“I didn’t
mean to scare you,” L’lorne said. “I
wouldn’t have even mentioned it if you hadn’t brought up the ghost thing. Let’s go over and take a closer look, okay?”
The kitchen
was bare, cabinets opened and stripped of contents long ago. The capped end of a gas line sat where a
stove once was and a large empty space marked the former location of a
refrigerator. The ghost was still eating
his cereal as L’lorne and Deborah gathered on the opposite side of the table.
“He’s
eating.”
“Was
eating,” L’lorne corrected. Suddenly,
the ghost lurched slightly, then he fell, face first, into his bowl, splashing
ghostly milk onto the table. “Hmm, must
have been the last thing he did.”
“Poor guy,”
Deborah managed to say as she watched the ghost slowly fade away. Across the room, she suddenly heard a loud
yawn and turned in time to see the ghost enter the kitchen and begin his
morning ritual. “He’s going to do it
again?”
“He’s caught
in a loop. The last few moments of his
life recreated again and again.” The
ghost opened a ghostly refrigerator door and removed a bottle of milk.
“Forever?” The cabinet held a box of cereal that only
appeared when the ghost touched it and he placed the bottle and the box on the
table while he went back for a bowl and spoon.
L’lorne
smiled that knowing smile that annoyed Deborah so much. “Forever is a long time. No, probably only until this house is knocked
down, then he’ll move on.”
“To where?” The ghost had paused before filling his bowl
and hefted a bag up from the floor and began looking for something inside.
L’lorne nearly replied when she noticed the ghost rolling something out on the table. Blueprints for a very familiar building. “Wait a second,” she said, examining the plans in more detail. “Well, that’s a coincidence.”
“What?” Deborah leaned over and looked at the plans,
but couldn’t make heads or tails of them.
“I don’t see.”
“Excuse
me!” L’lorne shouted so loud that
Deborah instinctively backed away, but in a moment she realized that L’lorne
wasn’t talking to her.
“Ah!” The ghost said. “How did you get into my house?” the ghost
suddenly demanded, a very irate look on his face.
“Sorry,
your front door was open. I’m from the
government,” L’lorne held up, very briefly, the ID she had used at the
CDPC. “I came to ask you some questions
about the Asylum.”
“Couldn’t
you have waited until I go to the office?
I’m still in my pajamas here,” the ghost didn’t seem to realize that he
was a ghost anymore, or that he should be repeating his death again, but
talking right at L’lorne just as he probably had in life.
“I am
sorry, but I was asked to get an immediate reply and you know how they are
about these things.”
“Don’t I?” the ghost groaned. “They’re constantly on me despite how perfect my design is. They’re always looking for ways to improve it, even though that is nearly impossible without compromising everything. In fact, if you’re here to suggest another design improvement, you can’t just see yourself right back out, because it needs no improvement.”
Deborah
leaned forward again to look at a name that sat on the plans. ‘David Engera’ it read, under the name for
the Asylum. “No no,” L’lorne said. “Nothing like that. What I wanted to ask was where you would
suggest placing a high security vault within the Asylum?”
“High
security vault? Why would you want one
of those in an asylum for the criminally insane?”
“Where better to hide something you don’t want the public to see than in a place no one with any sense would ever want to go?”
David
Engera considered this for a moment and nodded.
“That’s actually not a bad idea.
The design is meant to keep people in, of course, but it is just as good
at keeping people out. You’d be amazed
how many people become obsessed with crazed killers and the like. However, I think what you’re really looking
for is keeping people from getting whatever they’re trying to steal out, and
this certainly would fit the bill. It’s
much like the Great Wall in that way.
The Wall wasn’t built to necessarily keep the barbarians from getting
in, but to keep them from getting out with their ill gotten goods, you know?”
“I imagine it was very effective.”
“Impressively,
as long as they kept it manned, of course.
My asylum is much smaller, and easier to keep an eye on of course.” He grabbed the half rolled plans and began
searching through them. “You wouldn’t,
by any chance, be willing to tell me what kinds of things you wish to keep in
this vault?”
“Sorry, I
can only say that they want the place well ventilated as there’s bound to be
several people using the room at any given time, and it must be very secure.”
The ghost looked at L’lorne for a moment. “You’re not planning on putting people in this vault, are you?”
“Not to my
knowledge, but I’m sure that’s what they’re probably thinking.”
The ghost
grunting with disapproval. “Damn
government. They think they can do
anything they want, make anyone they want disappear. I bet that snake Donalds is responsible for
this investigation of yours. He’s going
to be the death of this nation, just you wait.”
The ghost calmed down after a moment of fuming and pointed to a location. “Here you go, the most secure place in the
asylum. It’s got everything they could
want. But you listen to me young lady,
if they use it for political prisoners, we’ll all regret it. Me, you, even Donalds. Make sure they know that.”
“I
will. Thank you. Again, sorry for disturbing your
breakfast.”
Engera had already begun pouring
milk and cereal into his bowl. “It’s
alright, just next time wait for office hours, okay?” He scooped up a clump of milk and cereal and
began eating. Moments later, he fell
over dead, again.
“Well, that explains a bit,” L’lorne
said as Engera’s ghost began his loop over again.
“Uh,” is all Deborah can manage.
“The milk was poisoned,” L’lorne
said. “They knew about his opposition to
their plans. He was killed, probably at
the order of this guy Donalds.”
“Yeah,” Deborah said, as she watched the ghost slowly fill his bowl with milk and cereal, ready to repeat his own murder again. She took off the glasses, not willing to watch it again. “How did you, uh, speak to him and have him speak back?”
“You just have to want to communicate with them,” L’lorne said. “In your case, the glasses would handle the rest.” She walked back to the sleeping area, Deborah quickly following. “Thanks to him. . .” L’lorne started.
“Engera. David Engera,” Deborah said, informing L’lorne
of what she had learned.
“Right, thanks to Mr. Engera, we
now know where your mother is.
Tomorrow,” L’lorne said as she sat down on the floor, stretching her
legs out in a way to indicate she was ready for rest. “Tomorrow we go get her.”
Deborah smiled as she laid
down. “Yeah.” And she fell asleep.
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Questions
1. What kind of person is Lcorn Llorne? What does she look like (in your mind)?
2. What kind of person is the Deborah Ignigus? What does she look like (in your mind)?
3. Does the setting seem fitting? Would you like to know more?
4. Does it feel out of place that suddenly there's a ghost in this story?
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